Editorial Report 12b

This post highlights the changes I made in my rebuttal paragraph in my rough cut.

Selection From Rough Cut

As with any controversial political topic, there is a prevalent opposing side to the idea of decriminalization. A common example of stigmas about drugs is that drug crimes always result in violence, and that those who deal with the production and distribution of drugs are dangerous people with malicious intentions.

Re-edited Selection 

As with any controversial political topic, there is a prevalent opposing side to the idea of decriminalization. These oppositions tend to come from those who do not recognize the common myths about drugs to be false. An example of an incorrect assumption about drugs is that drug crimes always result in violence, and that those who deal with the production and distribution of drugs are dangerous people with malicious intentions. 

Audience Questions

Content was changed when I added the middle sentence to the selection. The sentence informs readers that the following items are myths about drugs, and thus that they are false. This more accurately presents the content by classifying the list of items as a specific category. The form of this section also changed with the addition of the middle sentence. The sentence acts as a bridge between the topic sentence and the first major point of the paragraph. This more clearly presents the content, as it provides the paragraph with more flow and better transitions.