This post highlights some very minor changes I made from the fine cut to the final version of my essay.
Rough Selection
As with any controversial political topic, there is a prevalent opposing side to the idea of decriminalization. These oppositions tend to come from those who do not recognize common myths about drugs to be false.
Re-edited Selection
As with any controversial political topic, there is a prevalent opposing side to the idea of decriminalization. These oppositions tend to come from those who do not recognize the common myths about drugs to be false.
Audience Questions
The content of this selection changed (barely) when I added the word "the" before the subject of the sentence, "common myths". This better presents the content of the essay by specifying that the myths in question are important and relevant.
The form of this selection changed minimally by increasing the length of the sentence and ultimately of the paragraph.
You should try to use active voice in your writing. The way that it is now takes away from how interesting your topic really is. I don't feel the tension between the two opposing sides. These two sentence could be restructured into one to sound more like this
ReplyDelete"Those who still uphold the myths about drugs strongly oppose the idea of decriminalization"
But I didn't read your whole work, so in the context of where it is in your work, your way might be best.